Can I get comments on my poem?

Its a really nice poem, I like the words and some of the imagery... In the first stanza the last line rhymes, but it doesn't retain the same rhythm as the other lines. If you read it out loud, it doesn't seem quite in place. You could try a different rhyme, like switching it to "in hues of black and blue" and the next line rhyming with blue, or you can try and mess around with the lines to fix the rhythm a little bit. The last stanza is really good and so is the second one. When you said "delivering an ancient shiver", the adjective "ancient" works, and fits with poem's theme and makes sense, but their might be a better adjective to replace it... try a thesaurus. But it might be that its fine and I'm just crazy. Anyways, I really like it and think you should add more lines :p